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Imagining Him Here by =flaery:iconflaery:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Open




I see his name,
or imagine his voice,
always saying my love,
my darling . . .
Where does he hide
when I'm wishing?
He makes me foolish--
kissing in thoughts.
He'd never exist
in my tangible arms.
Can I just taste
him, and later
use a patch
of him?
Will he notice the paths
of my eyes pulling
me closer?
I'll keep asking
to avoid the ubiquitous
no.
©2004-2009 =flaery
:iconflaery:

Author's Comments

I know, I know, I should have been working on my project, but I couldn't do anymore, and this came to me last night . . . don't be mad, please! :tears:

I wasn't sure I was going to submit it, but then I was looking at some stocks, and I saw some good ones. I am happy with both parts and how they turned out. In 2 hours I have to leave for class . . . I'm going to miss having more time to write--silly college with its homework! ;)

Stock:

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*wtf Jan 27, 2004, 9:51:54 AM
wow, now this one I like a lot. it's pretty straight-forward and doesn't hide behind fancy alliteration. excellent poem :)
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=flaery Jan 27, 2004, 9:59:22 AM
It's probably straight-forward because I just wrote it all at once . . . today I made a few word changes, and that was it. I wasn't in a fluffy-flowery mood :)

Thanks for the comment and favorite! :blowkiss:

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Silence in the place of stupidity.

I adopted ~djthedj, ~icerose, and ~wanderingjizo through ~ daac. ~Ariga is also new. Go check all of them out! :)
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=flaery Jan 27, 2004, 10:00:06 AM
You think so? :shrug: To me it's somewhere between melancholy, frustrated, and hopeful. But, to each his/her own! :) Thanks for checking it out.

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Silence in the place of stupidity.

I adopted ~djthedj, ~icerose, and ~wanderingjizo through ~ daac. ~Ariga is also new. Go check all of them out! :)
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~peacockmask Jan 27, 2004, 12:55:40 PM
This is one of your best! I can just feel you craving for this man! This takes me back to when I felt that way, very descriptive! It flows so nicely! Great choice in stock! :D

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~devil-stock Jan 27, 2004, 1:26:48 PM
you used real romantic imagery - goes with teh softness of thes tock image - good job!

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let me be your muse
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=flaery Jan 27, 2004, 2:41:54 PM
:aww: Thank you! Yeah, I was feeling it very strongly when I wrote it. I wasn't sure if I wanted to submit it or not, but people seem to like it, so I'm glad. Thanks also for the comment about the stock, and the favorite! :hug:

--
Silence in the place of stupidity.

I adopted ~djthedj, ~icerose, and ~wanderingjizo through ~ daac. ~Ariga is also new. Go check all of them out! :)
:iconflaery:
=flaery Jan 27, 2004, 4:05:56 PM
Thank you :)

I was so happy to find your stock!

--
Silence in the place of stupidity.

I adopted ~djthedj, ~icerose, and ~wanderingjizo through ~ daac. ~Ariga is also new. Go check all of them out! :)
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!undefinability Jan 27, 2004, 7:31:19 PM
I keep asking to receive nothing in return.
I've come to love the silence.

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no.
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