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Juggling Heads by =flaery:iconflaery:

Categories Contests > 2003 > IonCreativity




Begin with the water--

     rivers
         ripple
       from
             fingers
          stroking
         the
     surface.
          
Suppose
      you
            take
                   steps
and defeated
the red ghosts' stare?


           He'll take
then she'll grab
                  and a push
pull match
            leaves you
            here--
breathless and imagining
their thoughts as tools:

wavelengths
tangling and suffocating
you.

And you . . .

                        just you . . .

                                                       teetering.
©2003-2009 =flaery
:iconflaery:

Author's Comments

Ok ok, I know I said the last poem was my going away present, but I saw this contest and I couldn't resist. I'm not going to explain this one except to say I wrote it because the contest inspired me :D

Stock is from: [link]

[link]

Edit: I changed the category since I saw the thread changed, and there is now a contest category for it :)

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=skiesofchaos Nov 24, 2003, 9:07:43 PM
very interesting structure. Nicely stepped and formed.. quite entertaining tripping along the verse.
Blessings,
Marion

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=flaery Nov 24, 2003, 9:10:30 PM
Thanks :) I was supposed to do something different from usual, and I don't normally mess to much with the structure like this, and so I thought it would be fun :D. (And it was!)

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~rockisdeaddclxvi Nov 24, 2003, 9:19:08 PM
wow..i really like it...
dw

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~peacockmask Nov 24, 2003, 9:20:13 PM
You are so creative! Such a great poem! I hope you win! :winner:

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:iconflaery:
=flaery Nov 25, 2003, 5:42:56 AM
Thanks--though the picture makes me laugh, and I wasn't intending that ;)

--
Silence in the place of stupidity.

I adopted ~djthedj, ~icerose, and ~wanderingjizo through ~ daac. Go check them out! :)
:iconflaery:
=flaery Nov 25, 2003, 5:43:37 AM
Hehe. Well, we shall see. I don't think I will, but I'm just glad it inspired me to write something :) Thanks!

--
Silence in the place of stupidity.

I adopted ~djthedj, ~icerose, and ~wanderingjizo through ~ daac. Go check them out! :)
:iconflaery:
=flaery Nov 25, 2003, 5:44:27 AM
Thanks!! :hug:

--
Silence in the place of stupidity.

I adopted ~djthedj, ~icerose, and ~wanderingjizo through ~ daac. Go check them out! :)
:iconariga:
~Ariga Feb 6, 2004, 7:02:24 AM
That must have taken some imagination to write.

~Ariga
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